Is it "What am I?" or is is "Who am I?" Think about that a little. What kinds of things will the notes be saying? Are we going to be able to see the notes as they are being applied to Taylor? Or will we only see them at the end? You also need to think about all those wide shots you have all in a row from #6 to #10. They would all be jump cuts unless the angles were changed in every one. Wides are hard to see any details and I'm not sure if you're using the wide shots to hide those details so we see the notes at the end or not. If you want us to see more details you'll need to use close ups or at least mediums.