In talking to the Hiki No producers, they gave me a suggestion to pass on to you to help make us care more for the camp, and that's to put Rascal's story at the front. Start off with Rascal's story and how he became an integral part of Critter Camp. You'd need to adjust your 5 points and script a bit but I think it would help your story. Right now it tells us a lot about the camp but the sense of "why should I care" is not that strong. It's a great informational story about the program but it doesn't hit on why the viewer should care. Let's make those adjustments before the end of the quarter.